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Friday, 17 May 2019

The Baby

One afternoon a family was on a boat until it crashed. Suddenly the baby fell out and survived but the rest didn’t. A tiger found the baby just as the tiger was going to eat him a lion came out of nowhere and rescued him. Surprisingly he woke up safe and sound in a cave the lion had taken him there. But then the tiger find him again by then the baby was now 4 the lion had given him food for 3 and a half years. Then there was a bang.

The tiger that was chasing him got shot by a human. Then more tigers came and more humans came. Soon they were all fighting the humans won but 5 were killed and 3 were injured. Quietly the humans cried then picked up the baby one family decided to adopt him. As the years went past the boy grew older when he was 12 he had learnt the story of his past. As much as he liked his new family he ran off when he was 14 and found same lion that had helped him when he was a baby. So he lived with the lion the the rest of his life.

2 comments:

  1. good story you have followed the structure of your plan very well this was a very interesting story what i did notice tho is that there was i fight in your story but you never rely specified that in your plan

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  2. I think that your story was fantastic and that it followed the plan although there was 1 or 2 grammar mistakes. AWESOME NICKY!!!!👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

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