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Friday, 7 June 2019

The Horses

Once there was a couple of horses who were friends. Until this day Jack yelled at Jill for not coming with Jack to the volcano. But really that was a dumb reason to be mad about something. But then Jack then said that he was sorry and that they should take a walk up to the volcano. Of course jill said yes because she likes him so While they were walking they were talking about what they were going to dinner. Soon they were at the top. Ouch. Jill tripped over a rock and Jack pushed her in the volcano Jill screamed as she fell. Jack laughed as he got his revenge on Jill for not coming to the volcano before. Surprisingly Jill survived because she landed on a ledge and could climb back up. Ughhhhh said Jack after he got pushed in from Jill and then Jill just sat there for a while. Brutally she accepted faith and jumped off. When Jill hit the lava the volcano erupted then Jack and Jill came flying out as thousands of pieces of ash.

Jack and Jill were now famous because some mysterious person had videoed the whole thing. obviously it got millions of hits and was on the news, youtube, and facebook then it was world wide. No one knows who recorded it, so that mystery will just go on forever. The very volcano still stands today but will never erupt again so if another horse goes in there it will never come back out or stand foot on the real world. Jack and Jill were now in a movie and in a book.
Some people thought Jill was cooler than Jack and some people thought that Jack was cooler than Jill. One person think Jack and Jill are both dumb and so is the myth about them. But now after his or her opinion everyone thinks that he recorded the video.

He probably did because he always looks suspicious when people bring it up. He just stands there agreeing to everything that everyone says.

1 comment:

  1. it is very good but i think you need a bit more full stops.
    -Nelly-
    (:

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